Sentenced: The 3-23-14 Edition
Shiri is sentenced by…
Page 2, paragraph 4, sentence 3:
“He felt the impact in his teeth…”
The context: MC is trying to outrun something horrible (yes, something, come on, I said I JUST cracked it) in order to loot medications in hopes of buying his wife some survival time (aka: or some sleep).
The why: It made me flinch thirty seconds in and that? That is tension. That is a hook. I don’t want to know why all of this is happening, I need to know why this is happening. I need to know what’s after him. I need to read this book.
Also, I need to learn how to do this thing. So, so very much.